Tuesday 15 December 2009

Marketing peice. writing task 1. Draft 1


This spring if you wish to see theatre truly come alive then see Chickens sheds original story of “The Attraction” based in the heart of a booming Gypsy community it will take you on a journey full of love, sorrow and retribution. Based at the chicken shed theatre in north London, Southgate this is the second time The Attraction has been brought back to audiences since 1990 due to public demand. A fantastic opportunity for you, you’re family and friends to be entertained whilst educated on the culture and magic from some of the early groups of gypsy’s.

Our journey begins with Maya a young woman seeking acceptance in a gypsy group with her young son Max, as she makes a new life for herself and sets up a beautiful home for her son, all is grand as she soon falls in love with the king of the gypsy’s Hal and they are to marry, but all blissful happiness is soon disrupted as tragedy sets in with revenge tailing not too far away. This is a show rich in colour and excitement with legend and culture oozing from every corner you look in. The attraction has been sponsored by one of the biggest high street names of fashion, River Island. So every costume looks authentically stunning as no stops have been made in the attention to detail. Chicken shed have indeed captivated audiences on a new level as they have put you right in the heart of the action with the performance happening all around you as you (can if you so wish) eat a traditional Ploughman’s meal.

A truly beautiful story that is worth anybody’s time who is seeking magic that they can take home with them. A show suitable for all the family. See Chicken Sheds The Attraction viewing from Wednesday 18th March to Saturday 4th April
Daily at 7.30pmSaturdays at 3.30pmThursdays at 1pm

(This show has been performed from Wednesday 18th of March to Saturday 4th April 2009)

5 comments:

  1. hi stephanie,
    your first draft of your marketing piece is good but there is room for improvment. starting with the introduction, this is inviting for the reader, with the picture on the side is nice.

    You could add a title to this piece to get the attention of the reader straight away. Some people have done this with a question, take a look at other peoples blogs. Maybe you could also write the name of the productin and also high light important information, take a look at my 2nd draft of my marketing piece.

    I think you could break up the 2nd paragraph as you talk about the story, then river island and eating at the performance, personally i would put about the food near the end when you talk about the shows details.

    In your last paragraphs you mention the dates of the shows twice. I dont think you need to have the one in brackets. what do you think? Also you dont mention anything about prices or details of booking information, telephone number, email etc.

    I hope this has helped
    laura davitt

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  2. yeh it has really helped thank you laura, yes i agree with you my opening isnt very eye catching i will improve that. keep the feedback coming :) !

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  3. Stephanie - interesting topic that I expect you will get more comments about. I agree with Laura that long sentences seem to take away from punchiness of a quick read... also you say coming is worth 'anybody's time' - and appropriate for families. Might be some interesting info out there about marketing a target audience that could be googled?
    Paula

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  4. hey Stephanie

    i really like this 1st draft it really pulled me in to the piece i love the way you pant the picture for the read. For me some of the sentences are a bit to long so may cut them down a little bit just it does not loss the focus from reader.

    i can not wait to see the next draft

    murat

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  5. hey stpeh,
    great first draft, i agree with laura when she said you should break up your text that talks about the sorty line, river island and food.
    if you break this up and put food near rthe end it can giev you a easy step into having the prices, times, dates etc

    also i think you should look at the layout of your details at the end, maybe present this more clearly.

    loved your use of descriptive writing to draw the reader in as well. i know its a marketing piece, but to a certain extent you need to paint the picture for the audience, and you have done this really well.

    as the show has been done before, maybe you could use some previous quotes from reviews of the show.

    hope this has helped

    sarah c

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